I agree with David about the overall look; it is neat and easy to read. I agree too about the key; there is no need to stick to the original key. However you need to be more careful with the way the voices are set out. For example, in the first bar, where there are three voices, there needs to be a crotchet rest above the bass E (indicating a rest in voices 1 and 2). Voice 2 should consist of crotchet E followed by 2 quaver Es, then crotchet D sharp. Voice 1 should be crotchet B followed by dotted crotchet A and quaver B. There are similar issues throughout the piece.
Eric from GuitarLoot
Renaissance and Baroque freak; classical guitars by Paul Fischer (1995) and Lester Backshall (2008)
Yamaha SLG 130NW silent classical guitar (2014), Ramirez Guitarra del Tiempo (2017)