OK well I guess I'm the first one to reply here.
I think you have a good feel for the piece but your rhythm and tempo is all over the place, do you practice with a metronome? It's not a sin to practice and play it at a significantly slower tempo than it's usually played as long as you're producing the written rhythms correctly and playing with a steady tempo throughout.
After you have that down you can experiment with rubato and other interpretive devices but the basic pulse and steady tempo must be ingrained beforehand. I don't see why you can't do this because you're hitting all the notes so that's not a problem from what I hear.
A word of advice, which you can heed or ignore - don't say that this is a reminder of how not to play it even in jest, it gives the person who's taking the time to listen to your recording a bad taste and it's basically a turnoff. I think that's why nobody responded yet even though you posted this in back in January.
Thanks for sharing and next time have more confidence in what you're sharing here on the forum.
Last edited by Ray on Fri Jul 17, 2015 12:09 am, edited 1 time in total.