Sushi wrote:Here's the first few measures. I've been working on this part specifically for a few weeks total.
I think I may have rushed some parts (maybe), and the dynamics need work.
i think it sounds really good so far and im no expert but here is my advice.
i would be careful to balance the melody and accomp. for example the beginning is mp in the score which you do well but the acomp. is much louder - try to soften this and stop the notes where indicated this, i thnik, will project the tune.
alos the drving rhythm, integral to the piece, could be accentuated with a bit of staccato where appropriate.
hope that helps, first one of this suite is beautiful might hacve a go myself this mornig.