i thought that sounded great. i could hear the upper voice very clearly. whenever i record i am struck with how dynamics and timbre get leveled out by the recording process. your tone was good, you understand the piece, you played it very cleanly.
for advice, i would encourage you to continue to pay attention to the voicings. i thought your rhythm could be a little stronger, so keep practicing it and perhaps consider using a metronome. also keep feeling the rhythm at the end of musical phrases so the next phrase start at the right moment. finally, play even more dynamically, making the quieter sections quieter and the louder sections louder.
but really that was very fine, sounded good, and sounded musical.
the things i mentioned to work on are the same things i find myself needing to focus on.